Matt Bellamy

Welcome to YWS! :) I'd like to remind you that we have a 2:1 ratio here, that is, we review two pieces of work by someone else before posting one ...

Hello, welcome to YWS! :) I'd like to remind you that here we operate a 2:1 ratio, that is, for every piece of writing we post, we first critique two ...

Great, you've made me jealous of how you write, are you happy now? :P I just love your tone, it sounds so good. I like how you swapped red and ...

I really like this. Your description, if slightly overused, is good. A couple of things: You introduce the character's name halfway through the poem, and this threw me a little. ...

I really like this. I think the theme you have running through it - things being gone by morning, and I like the way you managed to express this in ...

In general, I liked the concept of this poem. However, I found it a little hard to read in places, simply because of the length of some of the lines. ...

Very cute! I think it would look nicer if there were some capitalization, though. And I don't like that it dies, I would prefer it if it perhaps, rested on ...

Hey, firstly, welcome to the site. Here at YWS we do ask that you review two pieces of work before submitting your own, so you might want to take a ...

This was pretty good. A few things though: First you say you taste blood, and that he has hit your cheek, but then you say "he won't, he can't" as ...

I didn't find it confusing at all. However, it is a little cliché in places. I think you should add a little more to it to make it more personal ...

This sounds angry, and, while I know it sounds angry, it doesn't make me feel angry too, and really good poetry should do that. Your line breaks are strange, especially ...

I have never critiqued lyrics before. I used to write them, when I was all teen angsty at fourteen, and they were very, very bad! But I'll do my best ...

This is hard to critique! xD I like the shortness of the first line, setting the scene for the rest of the poem. Perched in the air...kind of makes me ...

I was once a follower Who just wanted to fit in A fool caught up with everyone’s thoughts A tiny change, but I'd put a full stop at the end ...

"Friction loses its mighty grip, as gravity drags me down to bitter ice." ^^ This stanza made me smile. I don't know if you wanted it to be amusing, but ...